tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post4230463286470111120..comments2023-10-19T10:08:00.241-04:00Comments on Write First, Blog Later: Dream Sequence BlogfestUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-5610743977005155872010-06-24T20:19:38.290-04:002010-06-24T20:19:38.290-04:00I'm still getting back to Amalia's list, e...I'm still getting back to Amalia's list, even though so much time has passed.<br /><br />I liked how--at least for me--the sense of touch was central to the dream. It was as if in the dream the usual hierarchy of the senses was changed.Tom Keplerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11213713830938688817noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-25019438890595487682010-06-06T13:38:15.540-04:002010-06-06T13:38:15.540-04:00Nice job with the dream sequence. The imagery crea...Nice job with the dream sequence. The imagery created from the dream is well done. Good details at the right moments to keep the scene moving.Dawn Embershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00214560861614476799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-20718976499730872112010-06-05T16:06:41.128-04:002010-06-05T16:06:41.128-04:00Nice!! Very vivid, I liked the part about the flui...Nice!! Very vivid, I liked the part about the fluid in the blisters...<br /><br /><3 Kelsey LeighKris n' Kelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15273239971556065096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-43647837506013547072010-06-05T13:11:09.497-04:002010-06-05T13:11:09.497-04:00Very nice. I loved that the trees were burning fro...Very nice. I loved that the trees were burning from the inside. Now I'm curious to find out who this man is. <br /><br />Nice job!Charity Bradfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01960821077619680661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-43932621984788126222010-06-04T23:49:10.381-04:002010-06-04T23:49:10.381-04:00I forgot to post mine until late, but I'm glad...I forgot to post mine until late, but I'm glad I got to yours this imagery was stunning and the entire scene was just so intense, nice job!Hayley Lovellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16786674202167099600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-88060270366616686492010-06-04T21:23:54.887-04:002010-06-04T21:23:54.887-04:00Great imagery, visceral and intense. Great entry f...Great imagery, visceral and intense. Great entry for the blogfest. :)sarahjayne smythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-31396040221201915122010-06-04T20:38:59.934-04:002010-06-04T20:38:59.934-04:00Aubrie, if it has those flaws I will enjoy it all ...Aubrie, if it has those flaws I will enjoy it all the more. I tend not to read much of other people's fantasy because it makes my WIP seem so dismal by comparison. So it will actually encourage me that there is hope yet.Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-84325977425037358122010-06-04T18:30:38.398-04:002010-06-04T18:30:38.398-04:00Wow. this is rather frightening..."she could ...Wow. this is rather frightening..."she could see the fluid forming in the blisters on her palms"...great imagery!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-50923975336244336862010-06-04T15:34:42.145-04:002010-06-04T15:34:42.145-04:00I'm so glad you got the book and it cheered yo...I'm so glad you got the book and it cheered you up! Remember, it's the first novel I wrote, so it has some adverbs, some telling, and a lot of POV's. Hope you like it!Aubriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10884036126491922530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-3411872558786012162010-06-04T14:28:35.268-04:002010-06-04T14:28:35.268-04:00Scary! Burning from within like she was. Your desc...Scary! Burning from within like she was. Your descriptions were intense.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-21630304036172205572010-06-04T11:59:47.604-04:002010-06-04T11:59:47.604-04:00The trees were burning from within? Nice touch. An...The trees were burning from within? Nice touch. And don't dreams seem so real that when we awaken we sometimes expect their consequences to be in the waking world? Good job. RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-91034986550922063532010-06-04T09:02:10.471-04:002010-06-04T09:02:10.471-04:00I really loved the images of the burning trees, wi...I really loved the images of the burning trees, with the bark like charcoal and the interiors glowing red. I also like the guy leading her out being the man on her bed, and that she checks for blisters when she wakes up. Nicely done!Amalia Dillinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13005039978668326144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-17483932424071815402010-06-03T19:03:29.786-04:002010-06-03T19:03:29.786-04:00Okay, I added the rest of that scene, so you can s...Okay, I added the rest of that scene, so you can see how she gets out!Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-57824457521153549732010-06-03T18:51:20.264-04:002010-06-03T18:51:20.264-04:00Donna, you're funny.
Wow, I didn't real...Donna, you're funny. <br /><br />Wow, I didn't realize it was *that* scary. It's actually based on a recurring nightmare I had when I was a kid. I actually had so many nightmares that I learned how to wake myself up to make them stop.Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-21546750143513626662010-06-03T17:49:24.394-04:002010-06-03T17:49:24.394-04:00Definitely a scary dream! And I also agree with th...Definitely a scary dream! And I also agree with the "visceral" comment(s). I don't think I'd want to sleep after this one. ;)Katiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06851403823244758904noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-88037831483747984462010-06-03T16:56:31.226-04:002010-06-03T16:56:31.226-04:00I agree with the other commenters, very visceral. ...I agree with the other commenters, very visceral. To realize you're dreaming and still be unable to wake up is terrifying in and of itself. The burning makes it even more powerful. Nice work.VR Barkowskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04927993233682731113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-86966551275280578892010-06-03T16:13:29.078-04:002010-06-03T16:13:29.078-04:00I was squeezing my fingers so tight reading this I...I was squeezing my fingers so tight reading this I think I got blisters. Very intense.<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-54553182155140791982010-06-03T14:44:39.535-04:002010-06-03T14:44:39.535-04:00Very nice!Very nice!Stephanie McGeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16507025637411479409noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-49127214043568104052010-06-03T11:55:15.986-04:002010-06-03T11:55:15.986-04:00Very visceral. The liquid in the blisters, the fea...Very visceral. The liquid in the blisters, the fear...all very urgent. Liked it.Raquel Byrneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12870113745683162915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-66773427142954207162010-06-03T10:52:57.602-04:002010-06-03T10:52:57.602-04:00I didn't want to make it too long. The poison...I didn't want to make it too long. The poison she's been infected with is causing her to have nightmares.Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-52165485357161865442010-06-03T10:39:27.784-04:002010-06-03T10:39:27.784-04:00Confusing, but I suppose that's the point. I l...Confusing, but I suppose that's the point. I like the imagery of constant burning and searing.<br /><br /> - EricEric W. Tranthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13842968931062056407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-69169228775021732262010-06-03T08:53:17.759-04:002010-06-03T08:53:17.759-04:00nice. i need to post mine early too. thanks for th...nice. i need to post mine early too. thanks for the reminder.Michelle Gregoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.com