tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post548139794532643345..comments2023-10-19T10:08:00.241-04:00Comments on Write First, Blog Later: First 250 Word BlogfestUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-9906652258905569942010-10-17T08:08:51.990-04:002010-10-17T08:08:51.990-04:00That's the best kind of writing, I think, when...That's the best kind of writing, I think, when your characters come to life and bug you! Well done though for persevering - the finished product will be so much the better for it :)<br /><br />RachRachael Harriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16764930101064527321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-9846746020314601782010-10-17T07:54:34.374-04:002010-10-17T07:54:34.374-04:00Oh Rachel, welcome! If you had any idea how many ...Oh Rachel, welcome! If you had any idea how many times I've "quit" this stupid book and started it again, you wouldn't believe it. I stop writing for months at a time and then somehow get draaaaaged back in to the story.<br /><br />I think these characters must somehow *actually* live in another dimension because they won't leave me alone.Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-41322339918618949872010-10-17T02:16:50.212-04:002010-10-17T02:16:50.212-04:00Hi Christine, I really enjoyed reading this. Have ...Hi Christine, I really enjoyed reading this. Have to say, your opening spiel in your blog was pretty entertaining too, had me hooked even before I started reading your story ;)<br /><br />RachRachael Harriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16764930101064527321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-33045952022381823962010-10-16T23:27:11.273-04:002010-10-16T23:27:11.273-04:00Your writing is simply beautiful. I got lost both ...Your writing is simply beautiful. I got lost both in the cold snow and with the Captain viewing the celebration going on on the other side of the windows lit by candlelight. Completely intrigued by your setting and wondering why the Captain is sitting in a fir tree watching, I would definitely turn the page. :DBrenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-73303484523684123602010-10-16T21:45:43.887-04:002010-10-16T21:45:43.887-04:00I liked the way this starts with the castle, focus...I liked the way this starts with the castle, focuses in on the gayla festivities inside, and then moves outward a little with the introduction of the main character.<br /><br />Normally I'd say that bit of sideways movement too much like taking a step back, but since the prior paragraph mentioned the movement in and out of the courtyard, it worked well form me.<br /><br />I'm not a reader who needs a lot of action, or even a character, to be the focus of an initial scene. By introducing the castle and its long history, it gives me a sense of connection to the setting. I expect the castle to play an essential role in the coming story. <br /><br />Like Camelot, or Helms Deep, or even Hogwarts; the "place" is an important character for its impact on characters.<br /><br />Anyway, this worked well for me, as an epic fantasy reader. I need setting AND character connection before I get involved in too much action.<br /><br />Good job Christine.<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-88057955446157136972010-10-16T16:17:10.233-04:002010-10-16T16:17:10.233-04:00Thanks Wendy ~ we were posting concurrently! I re...Thanks Wendy ~ we were posting concurrently! I really appreciate your perspective. <br /><br />Sometimes I wonder if we don't have a sort of literary ADHD as a society, that makes us too impatient for a story to begin, probably due to the popularity of movies, which have definitely shortened even my own attention span, I've noticed.Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-58367792714712906012010-10-16T16:13:47.962-04:002010-10-16T16:13:47.962-04:00Thank you all, for your input and kind comments.
...Thank you all, for your input and kind comments.<br /><br />Summer and Shallee, I hear what you are saying and I've really struggled over it. The problem is that if I jump right into the action, my readers come back with "Well, this was really exciting but I have no idea at all what is going on or who these people are. I'm totally confused. Can you please explain?" So I tried to do a little setup first but still keep it kind of interesting.<br /><br />This is why I am eternally rewriting. If you want to see an earlier version, look here: <a href="http://goldengryphonnovel.blogspot.com/2010/01/first-scene-jan-10-rewrite.html" rel="nofollow">First Scene Rewrite.</a>The criticism of that version (from a professional editor) was that although it was exciting, it had nothing to do with the main plot. So I had to create something that introduced the central conflict (Faldur vs. Chalmeth) right away.<br /><br />Francine, I think you are my "target audience!"Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-16436260018915281542010-10-16T16:07:00.221-04:002010-10-16T16:07:00.221-04:00I disagree with some others. As writers I think w...I disagree with some others. As writers I think we have all been fooled into thinking that we must hit everyone over the head immediately, otherwise, what we have written couldn't possibly be of any consequence. Please don't change the opening. Agents want to get zinged in paragraph one because they don't want to take the time and unfortunately, that is being reflected in some of the shlock out there being published. Your style is lovely, your pacing is great and I was totally interested. Maybe it's my age. I'm not in a hurry to get knocked over the head, as long as you're keeping me intereste with what you're saying. I woulnd't want to read you if you sounded like everyone else. Keep your style.Wendy Tyler Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10841984342368861282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-62457640381810777302010-10-16T15:41:55.207-04:002010-10-16T15:41:55.207-04:00I LOVE that first line. I generally love your desc...I LOVE that first line. I generally love your descriptions :)Mariekehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16383960692054256957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-36059164651317976112010-10-16T14:39:09.267-04:002010-10-16T14:39:09.267-04:00Hi,
Well, I love reading old books (literary mast...Hi,<br /><br />Well, I love reading old books (literary masterpieces), ones that don't gallop off with streams of dialogue cascading in fountains of conversation and little sense of place as so common in present day *easy read* novels. <br /><br />For me this was perfection: beautiful description, sense of time and place, and air of foreboding . . . I'm hoping the Captain hasn't just fallen out of the tree, and that he's overhearing something of great interest: perhaps riders below! :o<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-29206648779676392602010-10-16T14:01:28.208-04:002010-10-16T14:01:28.208-04:00I loved your opening, very lyrical and immediately...I loved your opening, very lyrical and immediately drops us into setting. My favorite line "he felt like an over-sized owl". I want to know more about this character and what's going to happen at the dance. I'd definitely read on.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09687047513163296827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-87416362207641943762010-10-16T13:15:34.836-04:002010-10-16T13:15:34.836-04:00I loved the first paragraph of description-- it wa...I loved the first paragraph of description-- it was beautiful. The second paragraph tempted me to skim, though. I want a person to connect with, and something to happen. I think maybe just condensing the first two paragraphs would help. Very beautiful writing, though! Nice job.Shalleehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09907680428735740943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-18609480136351854262010-10-16T12:34:09.951-04:002010-10-16T12:34:09.951-04:00Yes there's some lovely description there, jus...Yes there's some lovely description there, just waiting for the action to begin now.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-37793228721526296692010-10-16T12:27:24.122-04:002010-10-16T12:27:24.122-04:00Love your style of writing. I just feel someone sh...Love your style of writing. I just feel someone should be affected by it. I would read more though.<br /><br />I missed this blogfest. Maybe next time.E. Arroyohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06634213563563094173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5922561838307837931.post-72708364213707598842010-10-16T11:27:51.777-04:002010-10-16T11:27:51.777-04:00I really like your descriptions, but theres seems ...I really like your descriptions, but theres seems an awful lot her which made my mind kindof side track from the story.Summer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.com