Friday, August 20, 2010

Guess that Character Blogfest, Part 2

Okay, so here's what Raynor, our character from yesterday, actually looks like:
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Faldur strained to see the taller man’s face but he could not, for it was turned away from him. All that he could see was that he was dressed in black and that his hair was pale gold and fell in loose waves down his back, nearly as long as a woman’s...

Then he turned, and Faldur could finally see his face. Faldur suddenly felt chilled again. The man before them, with the long hair and strange clothing, was the image of Melbrinor himself.*

It was Raynor.

He looked much older than Faldur remembered, more than the five years which had passed. There were lines in his forehead and around his mouth, and he carried himself with an erectness that implied rigid training and authority. Raynor turned his head back and forth, surveying the area, and then stopped, staring in their direction. He smiled then - a small, wry smile as if something unexpected had occurred to him - and for the briefest second, Faldur felt the spell over himself and Mel flicker like a curtain in a wisp of breeze. He must have imagined it, however, for Raynor’s gaze passed over them and, turning, he retraced his steps back into the cave.

*Mel is tall, broad-shouldered, with a charming manner and wide smile.  Raynor is his younger brother.
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You can see that I still didn't go into too much description.  I think somewhere else I mention that he has hazel eyes.  He's quite the tortured lad, but has good reason to be.  Thanks for reading!

11 comments:

  1. Nice job, Christine! Great descriptions--I can see what he looks like now.
    This was fun! I will check out your Rainy Day Blogfest!

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  2. Excellent description!!!! It really paints a more visual picture of him!

    Thank you so much for your entry!!! I really enjoyed reading a piece of your work!!! I saw that you had an upcoming blogfest and had I not spent time setting up interviews I would have joined... just consider me lurking around here on the 25th!!

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  3. You're very welcome to lurk, Jen. The more the.. um.. lurkier!

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  4. Great description very indepth, I do not think that's what I pictured LOL, but guessing isn't my strong suit. :) Thanks for posting!

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  5. i was right... because that's paul bettany you're describing, right? with a wig?? no? well i can still pretend...

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  6. My guess was off, but I love your description. Have a great weekend!

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  7. I was close, except for the eyes. Love the description excerpt. :D

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  8. I think I had his hair a half shade darker, but got the length and eyes! Please tell me he occasionally wears boots and a cape so I can jump around my living room like a maniac shouting "yes, yes!"

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  9. He sounds stunning! I'm pretty sure my guess was way off, but he sounds amazingly drawn.

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  10. aspiring... I didn't know who Paul Bettany was, but he's a very close match.

    Vicki - jump away! You are right. ;-)

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  11. Well, I'm going to continue my comment from Part 1.

    All I can say is your writing is superb. Very clean, yet very descriptive.

    This is a book I would buy in a heartbeat.

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